Please stand behind the yellow line…
Update: I better clarify this upfront - I’m writing as a woman here.
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“Aren’t you gonna give me a hug?”
It’s hard to resist, especially when I’m looking into those soulful eyes. Maybe I should - he really needs it. I guess I need it too.
It always feels comforting clinging tightly onto him, leaning on his wide chest, feeling his arms wrap firmly but gently around me, as I catch a bit of his distinct scent…
“Instinct,” I tried to tell him the other time, “it’s just instinct.”
But instinct wasn’t good enough for him, for he was one who needed to understand why, and instinct was too fuzzy, too nebulous, too misty an explanation for that penetrating mind of his.
Maybe he was just too serious. Too passionate, too intense, even for someone like me.
Or perhaps, I’m too afraid to lose him, the way I lost the others because those relationships didn’t quite work out. No, I cannot lose him. He’s the only one who’s come so close, who really understands me, whom I can really connect with. I must not lose him…
“Your train is here,” I whisper, releasing my hold as the train approached.
“The next one,” he says with finality.
I don’t mind at all, so I cling on again.
After so many tumultous weeks, it finally looks like he’s accepted the fact that it was not to be. Or shall I say, he’s resigned to that fact.
I still see the resignation in those tear-brimmed eyes, the intense disappointment choking his forlorn soul, when it finally sunk in that I would never, ever, ever, be in a romantic relationship with him. I had to assure him that I love him deeply as a friend, but never romantically, and he had to give it up. I suppose it was my repeated insistence that finally convinced him, since he couldn’t take instinct as a valid reason.
Today marks a new chapter in our lives, now that things are finally clear to him. Those 2 difficult hours at our favourite Italian cafe just now were certainly worth the pain. We can finally be the closest and bestest of friends, without the complications of a romantic relationship…
It feels good as he stealthily draws a breath through my hair. He likes the scent of my hair, but he’s just too shy to admit it, just as I won’t admit my secret delight in him inhaling me in…
“Please stand behind the yellow line,” the familiar recoded female voice sounds throughout the station.
A train is approaching. I need to go.
It’s hard to push him away, even gently, as I know he doesn’t want to go. But I know he’s a man of his word - the next train is here, and he will go.
“Your train is here, and I have to go,” I glance at my watch, “it’s almost 4:30.”
It hurts to see those eyes brimming with tears, and I know mine will soon follow.
“Goodbye.”
He must be too emotional to respond.
It doesn’t matter. I have to go. Fast. Don’t think. Can’t let him see me tearing. Don’t look back. Keep walking. He’ll be ok, I’m sure. He’ll be ok…
But I look back, when the screams of a woman and the squeal of the train hits my ears.
And I see those soulful eyes again, looking back at me, just as the train hits him.
I scream out loud.
So loud, that it wakes me up.
It’s 4:30am, but I doubt I can get back to sleep.
I hope he’s ok.
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Fiction. Obviously.
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I’m writing as a woman, in case you’re still wondering.
And I’ve done it such that there are many gaps in the story for your mind to fill in.
Tell me if it works, or which parts you don’t get.
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update:
mis_nomer tries her hand at writing a similar story, but as a guy.

for a moment, i swear i thought u were gay.
Comment by sassyjan — September 26, 2005 @ 11:08 pm
i dont know whether to laugh or to cry. *sigh*
Comment by tinkertailor — September 26, 2005 @ 11:13 pm
Words cannot describe the way this post hit me… “He’s resigned”, “I’m too afraid to lose him”… echoes a familiar encounter.
Comment by kosmickate — September 27, 2005 @ 2:09 am
that was fantastic - it really drew me in. at first i thought it was paedophilic, then i thought it was gay. luckily you thought to put a disclaimer at the end, haha! you have a flair for writiing, most definitely.
Comment by sarah — September 27, 2005 @ 4:25 am
and you really should be sleeping at this time - it’s almost 4.30.
but thanx
Comment by tinkertailor — September 27, 2005 @ 4:28 am
love it.
Comment by becca — September 27, 2005 @ 9:32 am
fuck! For an instant, i so wanted to see you hug “him”.
Comment by The Hungry Bunny — September 27, 2005 @ 2:18 pm
I like it
I cannot imagine myself looking into the eyes of my lover just before he got knocked down by a train *shudders*
Comment by muzi — September 27, 2005 @ 3:09 pm
It works. I like the intermingling of the resolution to leave and that tremendous fear of something bad happening to the other person after you go.
The instinct part was a bit fuzzy for me though. I suppose I think that women tend to know exactly why they are breaking up — just that they choose not to tell the guy, or the guy just would not understand. I think instinct is a guy’s word for a female trait. Women would just say, “I know..” Ha!
Thanks for the post.
Comment by mis_nomer — September 29, 2005 @ 9:23 am
“just that they choose not to tell the guy, or the guy just would not understand”
i think so too. or sometimes they’ve already told the guy, but the guy doesn’t believe it, so they just use ‘instinct’ hoping that it’ll help things.
thanx for your comments.
Comment by tinkertailor — September 29, 2005 @ 9:47 am
You are a fantastic writer. Keeps me hooked till the end. It works…. at least for me. I would have been an emotional wreck mid-way through the story though. Woman of varied emotions, I am…
Comment by Elvina — October 14, 2005 @ 12:24 pm
i’m a woman and i so don’t write like that lah nabeh.
:(
Comment by minishorts — October 14, 2005 @ 12:27 pm
i feel the delivery might be better if you tone down the ‘feminity’ by some so ‘her’ feelings will flow more subtly.
just my 2cts worth.
Comment by aberwyn — October 14, 2005 @ 2:10 pm
thanx, elvina.
and minishorts, maybe you’re not womanly enough?
aberwyn, thanx, but i’m not exactly sure what you mean? i’d be glad if u could give specific examples?
Comment by tinkertailor — October 14, 2005 @ 2:11 pm
Very feminine indeed. It really feels like a natural woman.
Comment by Brennan — October 14, 2005 @ 6:05 pm
Wow. You must have a feminine side that you are quite in touch with. Good! You’re officially declared as the new S.N.A.G!
Comment by Shelly — October 14, 2005 @ 11:46 pm
Ok, ok, you’ve made your point.
Comment by israphale — October 24, 2005 @ 5:24 am
touched my heart your story did (inspite of it being fictional)…hell i wish i have the guts ’she’ had…how do i turn down a guy whom i only treat as a friend and who cannot take no for an answer! Every time he asks me out, i’ll start having internal conflict..sigh
Comment by AngKuGuey — October 27, 2005 @ 8:51 am